The Arcana is one of the themes of the series, hence why I'm mentioning it. It also revolves around forming bonds/friendships/relationships with other characters. A friend showed me them. There is one more thing, but its a spoiler to your VN, so I won't say.
Ah I see. I based the Arcana off of the Tarot Cards due to really enjoying the idea behind them. I will have to take a look at that game though cause it sounds interesting!
Story is very interesting and even though characters look kinda small, I think art is cute! I'm curious to know how MC would look like... Will you add a sprite for him in the future updates? Or MC is this character that's being showed on starting screen? Anyway, I think it started in a very good way and I hope you keep updating it! :D
The character on the starting screen is not the MC. You will meet that character in the next update. There is a headshot of the MC once you obtain ARMA. Its on the top left. I am going to overhaul the character sprites in a later update, but I do like the small look to them so they don't overpower the scene and block out the background. I will probably add CG art of the MC later down the road though! I'm glad you like it so far!
Oh sorry for missing it, now I found it after rolling back, it was pretty small on screen hehe. And it's not a problem the characters look a bit small anyway :D. MC is looking good, even though it's a small sprite.. Anyway, thanks for the reply :)
They look too thin, like they are unhealthily thin. For example: Yukine, for being studying a major in Athletics he's almost bulimic thin. Which makes no sense, someone studying to major in Athletics should have at the very least some muscle, since it makes sense that he'd want to dedicate himself to a career centered around sports...
That was my thought as well. The fact he wears looser clothing does not help either. I will be trying to define his muscles more when I go back and redraw the sprites to see if it will help.
Cute story, and I was enthralled by the characters. I do have some reservations about the A.R.M.A. though. It's a good plot device, and I see how it can propel the story, but it does seem distinctly unscientific, and yet extremely advanced at the same time. It's hard for me to believe that Iliff, a student, would have bene capable of creating some sort of advanced human-machine interfacing AI, it with all it can do. It does seem like the story is slightly cognizant of this, though.
I'm thinking of the bit about the unexplained energy. To detect something, you would have to have a detector made in the first place, and know what to look for. I don't think it makes sense to have a general detector that can detect anything and everything. The MC does make a note along those lines.
Maybe you have plans for this.
In any case, that's just my opinion, and I could still enjoy the story in spite of this.
I definitely do have some plot points down the road for the ARMA and why it works the way it does. I do agree that in the beginning it does sound a bit out of place and I am hoping as the story progresses and the other plot points come to light it will make more sense. Thanks for the feedback though, this was very helpful!
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cannot wait for the next update!!!!
I love the story so far
Thanks a bunch! I am working hard to get the next update written and coded.
Hello, how are things? I want to be active on itch.io
Doing pretty well just getting more work done slowly but surely.
Do you happen to play Persona? X3
I have not actually.
The Arcana is one of the themes of the series, hence why I'm mentioning it. It also revolves around forming bonds/friendships/relationships with other characters. A friend showed me them. There is one more thing, but its a spoiler to your VN, so I won't say.
Ah I see. I based the Arcana off of the Tarot Cards due to really enjoying the idea behind them. I will have to take a look at that game though cause it sounds interesting!
This is so cool! ^_^
Thank you!
Story is very interesting and even though characters look kinda small, I think art is cute! I'm curious to know how MC would look like... Will you add a sprite for him in the future updates? Or MC is this character that's being showed on starting screen? Anyway, I think it started in a very good way and I hope you keep updating it! :D
The character on the starting screen is not the MC. You will meet that character in the next update. There is a headshot of the MC once you obtain ARMA. Its on the top left. I am going to overhaul the character sprites in a later update, but I do like the small look to them so they don't overpower the scene and block out the background. I will probably add CG art of the MC later down the road though! I'm glad you like it so far!
Oh sorry for missing it, now I found it after rolling back, it was pretty small on screen hehe. And it's not a problem the characters look a bit small anyway :D. MC is looking good, even though it's a small sprite.. Anyway, thanks for the reply :)
Promissing plot, not a fan of the artwork, though...
Thanks for the comment! If I may ask, what is it about the artwork that makes it unfavorable. I’m looking to improve anywhere I can.
They look too thin, like they are unhealthily thin. For example: Yukine, for being studying a major in Athletics he's almost bulimic thin. Which makes no sense, someone studying to major in Athletics should have at the very least some muscle, since it makes sense that he'd want to dedicate himself to a career centered around sports...
Ah that was an issue I had noted when I initially made the sprites due to my canvas size. It’s something I do plan to go back and fix.
Good to know, though I expanded the reply. Check it out whenever you can. To give you a more detailed explanation.
That was my thought as well. The fact he wears looser clothing does not help either. I will be trying to define his muscles more when I go back and redraw the sprites to see if it will help.
Might want to mark the Windows version as also working on Linux
Thanks I missed that originally. It is updated to reflect Linux now.
Cute story, and I was enthralled by the characters. I do have some reservations about the A.R.M.A. though. It's a good plot device, and I see how it can propel the story, but it does seem distinctly unscientific, and yet extremely advanced at the same time. It's hard for me to believe that Iliff, a student, would have bene capable of creating some sort of advanced human-machine interfacing AI, it with all it can do. It does seem like the story is slightly cognizant of this, though.
I'm thinking of the bit about the unexplained energy. To detect something, you would have to have a detector made in the first place, and know what to look for. I don't think it makes sense to have a general detector that can detect anything and everything. The MC does make a note along those lines.
Maybe you have plans for this.
In any case, that's just my opinion, and I could still enjoy the story in spite of this.
I wish you all the best going forward!
I definitely do have some plot points down the road for the ARMA and why it works the way it does. I do agree that in the beginning it does sound a bit out of place and I am hoping as the story progresses and the other plot points come to light it will make more sense. Thanks for the feedback though, this was very helpful!
Definitely going to date all of them. 😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍