Xou guys did a good job of rewriting UwU while it was fine before, it's definitely better now, more immursive, and is able to pervey the feelings xou want to get across~ ^^_ I had generally good vibes as I read~ And while the implications of what's to come are daunting, I'm excited to see how xa'll will change the way this plays out :p
I have a few concerns "^^, not meaning to critique to harshly, but what happened to my Ongaku!? OwO Looks like my handsome boy ate 1ne too many chicken nuggers and gained a pair of thunder thighs! xD but... It haaas made way for something else between them thighs to grow O///O
Generally, I like the new art :) the lack of shading somehow looks better, when logically, the lack of shadows should have it lose depth, but it doesn't! n_n
My 2econd concern is the inability to change MC's name, any reason for that? :/ Not that I hate playing out as someone else, but for me, being able to use my fursona helps me immurse myself as the protagonist.
But overall, good job! :D I can tell xa'll had fun planning out how to rewrite this, and when xou're enjoying xourself, it really does translates into xour work UwU keep it up >.</
Originally the Ongaku sprite had an error with the large thighs, but everyone thought it was kinda funny and also thought that it would add diversity to the characters since they are all canines. As for the MCs name, in the story that is the name of the character and we felt that providing the actual character name would help hook readers to understand his character as who he is rather than if a name was given by the reader. Hope that all makes sense lol.
Honestly created an account just to tell you how much I love this game.
I came into this not having high hopes, as someone who has played many VNs, I have seen the good, bad and the worse.
This blew me away, many VNs ive played tend to focus too much on visuals or choices rather than story and you, you absolute beautiful person created exactly what i have wanted to see in a VN.
Not once have I ever been so enthralled by a game like this, the writing is superb. While there may be some parts where I was confused, it was rather easy to follow along.
Thank you for making a wonderful game, and I look forward to seeing where this goes.
Thank you. This means a lot. I have wanted nothing more than to focus on the story and that is why my team and I are going back to do a full re-write of the two chapters. The over-all story will remain the same, but we are cleaning up some parts that were confusing and filling in some plot holes that happened. I hope the re-writes will be just as good, if not better than the original!
ummm... just after class if you show the book the game shows that the main character asks to see the book that they showed . should this not be the professor soren asking?
Oh whoops. This was an error. Intertwined is being re-created from the ground up so this will be fixed during that. It is mostly to fix the writing, but I hope the new re-writes will appeal to people haha!
it's fine XD it's more amusing then anything i suppose. i actually didn't even notice for a few seconds and the was like "wait, what?!" and scrolled back through dialog.
Thank you for your amazing work! There are 3 best mystic VN's i seen ever - Intertwined, Repeat and Echo.I do not undertake to judge which is better, all are good in their own way. Look forward to the next update!
I'm speechless. I can't describe how amazing this Vn is, I was putting off playing it for months and I regret not doing it before, the story left me hooked and I couldn't stop playing until the update was finished. And woow the art style is fascinating, and the music chosen is without a doubt the best, I just love this Vn. Hope to help you on Patreon soon, you really deserve it, can't wait for the next update.
(By the way, an apology if my English is not good, it is not my native language.)
*NOT REALLY SPOILERS BUT STILL GOOD TO CONSIDER BEFORE READING!*
Really enjoyed the game so far! The Tarot cards were not expected, primarily because I am not a big fan of them but I felt a bit excited about it when going through the story. I guess that's good?
Though, I have a bit of a problem understanding the end of Day 4 (that blood scene), especially how it fits in the storyline. I called some of my friends over and see if they can find some logic in it. So far some good ideas have been spoken but nothing crucial. So may I ask, what is it with the snow (if it's possible to answer)? There wasn't any snowfall, so the whole scene seems impossible to ever occur...
I also wanted to get some explanation (if it's again possible) on Melmond's good and bad eye. In the story, it is said that he can't see on his RIGHT eye until later in the game and that's noticable by a scar on his eye. But sometimes, Melmond is shown with a scar on his LEFT eye (game UI with Melmond's head in a circle + on a card that Kurt is holding also features the same issue). Is there any reason for the scar to change places? My other guess is, if it was maybe changed during development? It's quite confusing to say the least! :-(
For the end, I want to wish every single one of you best luck to the future for anything you're currently working on! Keep up the good work!
Let me answer some of your questions. The snowfall is caused by magic. WInter's Fury is a character you encounter who does use ice magic. The snowfall was supposed to simulate that and it is explained much more in the next update that is coming. As for the blood scene itself, that was more of a dream not an actual event that happened. If that is not clear, we can make some edits.
For Melmond's scar, he actually has two scars. A scar across his eye on his right eye. and a lightning scar on his left eye. So that may be what you are confused about. The lightning scar does not show on his younger character because it happened after the fact.
Any other questions, I can try to answer to the best of my ability.
Downloaded this because it looked interesting and I have to say I'm glad I did. The story had me interested from the start, but once the tarot came up I was hooked. Can't wait for the next update! I'm excited to see where the story goes from here.
Hmmmm it's good so far though I am playing this on my phone via joiplay so the mini game thing is a bit funky, as it is pretty much luck based(have to rapid tap and reload till you win took me about ten trys for the first round 3 or four for the second. But either way I'm enjoying it so far it's a pleasant change of pace from the style of visual novel I normally play.
its fine I'm mostly putting this message up in case others on mobile want to play it genuinely the only issue is the mini game it might be better on tablet as the hitboxes would be bigger but if you save and hit as soon as they apear you can pass fairly easily
As of the moment there is nothing explicit. There is one sprite that appears in a swimming speedo, but nothing revealing. Down the line there will be, but I will be adding a switch to change between sfw and nsfw in a future update.
The Arcana is one of the themes of the series, hence why I'm mentioning it. It also revolves around forming bonds/friendships/relationships with other characters. A friend showed me them. There is one more thing, but its a spoiler to your VN, so I won't say.
Ah I see. I based the Arcana off of the Tarot Cards due to really enjoying the idea behind them. I will have to take a look at that game though cause it sounds interesting!
Story is very interesting and even though characters look kinda small, I think art is cute! I'm curious to know how MC would look like... Will you add a sprite for him in the future updates? Or MC is this character that's being showed on starting screen? Anyway, I think it started in a very good way and I hope you keep updating it! :D
The character on the starting screen is not the MC. You will meet that character in the next update. There is a headshot of the MC once you obtain ARMA. Its on the top left. I am going to overhaul the character sprites in a later update, but I do like the small look to them so they don't overpower the scene and block out the background. I will probably add CG art of the MC later down the road though! I'm glad you like it so far!
Oh sorry for missing it, now I found it after rolling back, it was pretty small on screen hehe. And it's not a problem the characters look a bit small anyway :D. MC is looking good, even though it's a small sprite.. Anyway, thanks for the reply :)
They look too thin, like they are unhealthily thin. For example: Yukine, for being studying a major in Athletics he's almost bulimic thin. Which makes no sense, someone studying to major in Athletics should have at the very least some muscle, since it makes sense that he'd want to dedicate himself to a career centered around sports...
That was my thought as well. The fact he wears looser clothing does not help either. I will be trying to define his muscles more when I go back and redraw the sprites to see if it will help.
Cute story, and I was enthralled by the characters. I do have some reservations about the A.R.M.A. though. It's a good plot device, and I see how it can propel the story, but it does seem distinctly unscientific, and yet extremely advanced at the same time. It's hard for me to believe that Iliff, a student, would have bene capable of creating some sort of advanced human-machine interfacing AI, it with all it can do. It does seem like the story is slightly cognizant of this, though.
I'm thinking of the bit about the unexplained energy. To detect something, you would have to have a detector made in the first place, and know what to look for. I don't think it makes sense to have a general detector that can detect anything and everything. The MC does make a note along those lines.
Maybe you have plans for this.
In any case, that's just my opinion, and I could still enjoy the story in spite of this.
I definitely do have some plot points down the road for the ARMA and why it works the way it does. I do agree that in the beginning it does sound a bit out of place and I am hoping as the story progresses and the other plot points come to light it will make more sense. Thanks for the feedback though, this was very helpful!
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Xou guys did a good job of rewriting UwU while it was fine before, it's definitely better now, more immursive, and is able to pervey the feelings xou want to get across~ ^^_ I had generally good vibes as I read~ And while the implications of what's to come are daunting, I'm excited to see how xa'll will change the way this plays out :p
I have a few concerns "^^, not meaning to critique to harshly, but what happened to my Ongaku!? OwO Looks like my handsome boy ate 1ne too many chicken nuggers and gained a pair of thunder thighs! xD but... It haaas made way for something else between them thighs to grow O///O
Generally, I like the new art :) the lack of shading somehow looks better, when logically, the lack of shadows should have it lose depth, but it doesn't! n_n
My 2econd concern is the inability to change MC's name, any reason for that? :/ Not that I hate playing out as someone else, but for me, being able to use my fursona helps me immurse myself as the protagonist.
But overall, good job! :D I can tell xa'll had fun planning out how to rewrite this, and when xou're enjoying xourself, it really does translates into xour work UwU keep it up >.</
Originally the Ongaku sprite had an error with the large thighs, but everyone thought it was kinda funny and also thought that it would add diversity to the characters since they are all canines. As for the MCs name, in the story that is the name of the character and we felt that providing the actual character name would help hook readers to understand his character as who he is rather than if a name was given by the reader. Hope that all makes sense lol.
Honestly created an account just to tell you how much I love this game.
I came into this not having high hopes, as someone who has played many VNs, I have seen the good, bad and the worse.
This blew me away, many VNs ive played tend to focus too much on visuals or choices rather than story and you, you absolute beautiful person created exactly what i have wanted to see in a VN.
Not once have I ever been so enthralled by a game like this, the writing is superb. While there may be some parts where I was confused, it was rather easy to follow along.
Thank you for making a wonderful game, and I look forward to seeing where this goes.
Thank you. This means a lot. I have wanted nothing more than to focus on the story and that is why my team and I are going back to do a full re-write of the two chapters. The over-all story will remain the same, but we are cleaning up some parts that were confusing and filling in some plot holes that happened. I hope the re-writes will be just as good, if not better than the original!
Haha I don't doubt it! Just don't burn yourselves out :D
ummm... just after class if you show the book the game shows that the main character asks to see the book that they showed . should this not be the professor soren asking?
Oh whoops. This was an error. Intertwined is being re-created from the ground up so this will be fixed during that. It is mostly to fix the writing, but I hope the new re-writes will appeal to people haha!
it's fine XD it's more amusing then anything i suppose.
i actually didn't even notice for a few seconds and the was like "wait, what?!" and scrolled back through dialog.
i also stand at the precipice arcanus and am excited to see what happens next but my patience is vast and distractions are plenty.
i'm sure your re-writes will do fine :)
Thank you! I am hoping it will be awesome, but we shall see!
oh :) i see the main menu has changed since i last played.
and the mouse is custom , very nice indeed.
i guess this means i have a lot to look forward to and im very excited.
great game also Lliff is the best boi
i cant solve the riddle in sunday sep 16 pls i need help
pls help
The riddle answer is time.
love this update hope for more nsfw
Oh definitely! Hoping to add more as the story progresses!
nice
My Congratulations!!!An amazing VN i was searching one like this since long time, and this is really, realy good!! From Italy.
Great update :O
Thank you for your amazing work! There are 3 best mystic VN's i seen ever - Intertwined, Repeat and Echo.I do not undertake to judge which is better, all are good in their own way. Look forward to the next update!
Greetings from Russia!
yesss love the new updat
Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it!
Just gonna say, the MC is a great example role model of a motivational speaker. haha
This made me laugh so hard considering the MC literally wings everything he does haha.
This look good, I would play it if it comes to android
We are looking into getting an android build made. Hopefully soonish.
thanks 😊
use Joiplay
Shit.
Only first chapter finished?
How much will be of them?
The original plan is for 12 chapters.
Wow, so much.
Thanks for answer.
after doing this crazy adventure I STILL CANNOT PRONOUNCE ILIFF CORRECTLY
Eye-liff is how you pronounce it.
thanks for stopping me from developing 9,067 accents while trying to pronouncing it right
haha no problem! Yeah he has the weirdest name of them all.
I almost died from laughing at this
Android?
I have not made a port for android yet. I will have to look into it.
oh you so should cause then I can play and rate and give the link on my server but like idk many people with computers to download it 😅
you can play intertwined on android with "joiplay". Worked flawlessly on my phone so far
I'm speechless. I can't describe how amazing this Vn is, I was putting off playing it for months and I regret not doing it before, the story left me hooked and I couldn't stop playing until the update was finished. And woow the art style is fascinating, and the music chosen is without a doubt the best, I just love this Vn. Hope to help you on Patreon soon, you really deserve it, can't wait for the next update.
(By the way, an apology if my English is not good, it is not my native language.)
Thank you so much for your comment. I am glad your enjoying the game! I hope the next Chapter will be just as good for you!
I just found another itch account posting this game. Do you know about that account?
Edit:Thanks. I reported it.
That account is now "404"
What? No. This should be the only account that has the rights to post this game.
*NOT REALLY SPOILERS BUT STILL GOOD TO CONSIDER BEFORE READING!*
Really enjoyed the game so far! The Tarot cards were not expected, primarily because I am not a big fan of them but I felt a bit excited about it when going through the story. I guess that's good?
Though, I have a bit of a problem understanding the end of Day 4 (that blood scene), especially how it fits in the storyline. I called some of my friends over and see if they can find some logic in it. So far some good ideas have been spoken but nothing crucial. So may I ask, what is it with the snow (if it's possible to answer)? There wasn't any snowfall, so the whole scene seems impossible to ever occur...
I also wanted to get some explanation (if it's again possible) on Melmond's good and bad eye. In the story, it is said that he can't see on his RIGHT eye until later in the game and that's noticable by a scar on his eye. But sometimes, Melmond is shown with a scar on his LEFT eye (game UI with Melmond's head in a circle + on a card that Kurt is holding also features the same issue). Is there any reason for the scar to change places? My other guess is, if it was maybe changed during development? It's quite confusing to say the least! :-(
For the end, I want to wish every single one of you best luck to the future for anything you're currently working on! Keep up the good work!
Let me answer some of your questions. The snowfall is caused by magic. WInter's Fury is a character you encounter who does use ice magic. The snowfall was supposed to simulate that and it is explained much more in the next update that is coming. As for the blood scene itself, that was more of a dream not an actual event that happened. If that is not clear, we can make some edits.
For Melmond's scar, he actually has two scars. A scar across his eye on his right eye. and a lightning scar on his left eye. So that may be what you are confused about. The lightning scar does not show on his younger character because it happened after the fact.
Any other questions, I can try to answer to the best of my ability.
Downloaded this because it looked interesting and I have to say I'm glad I did. The story had me interested from the start, but once the tarot came up I was hooked. Can't wait for the next update! I'm excited to see where the story goes from here.
I'm glad your enjoying it! The Tarot are a main part of the game so you will be seeing them more and more.
I really like it! :D
Thank you!
How do I rate it tho? :C
should be on the top right of the main window.
Thank you <3 x
Hmmmm it's good so far though I am playing this on my phone via joiplay so the mini game thing is a bit funky, as it is pretty much luck based(have to rapid tap and reload till you win took me about ten trys for the first round 3 or four for the second. But either way I'm enjoying it so far it's a pleasant change of pace from the style of visual novel I normally play.
Sorry if it’s a little clunky on phones. I tested the VN using a PC so I am not sure how it acts on a phone.
its fine I'm mostly putting this message up in case others on mobile want to play it genuinely the only issue is the mini game it might be better on tablet as the hitboxes would be bigger but if you save and hit as soon as they apear you can pass fairly easily
Okay. I will put in my notes nonetheless to see if I can do something about getting it to function a bit better on mobile.
This update was awesome!! And new Yukine animations are looking good too, like for tail wagging. Will the other doggos receive it too? 😅
The plan is to animate them all at some point. I was testing the animations with this update to see if they will work well and it seems they have.
Thank you for an interesting update!
That reminds me a "Repeat" VN by Shirokoi:) Wishes, strange sounds...
Repeat was definitely an inspiration. I love the supernatural vibe so I do my best to incorporate it.
need help on rittle
The answer to the riddle is Time. I forgot to make that easier my bad lol.
yah i find it its all good
Okay awesome!
Thanks to the power of Joiplay I can now play this promising gayme
Thank you for your great work!
Greetings from Russia.
Your welcome!
Greetings from America!
Is there NSFW content in this game? I don't have a problem with that stuff U just want to know before I dive into it
As of the moment there is nothing explicit. There is one sprite that appears in a swimming speedo, but nothing revealing. Down the line there will be, but I will be adding a switch to change between sfw and nsfw in a future update.
How far off is that update?
A couple of updates off. There's a number of things before the nsfw content comes into play.
Oh I see, I'm going to try this VN since it looks pretty cool. Thanks again for your help
Your welcome!
Just played through the VN, I like it this far.
Ongaku's face looks a bit squished, like as if he spent his entire childhood getting mach 1 footballs in the face.
haha yeah I know about that. It will be fixed in the art update I’m working on!
is this youre first game if it is its very well made
This is my first Visual Novel game, yes.
cannot wait for the next update!!!!
I love the story so far
Thanks a bunch! I am working hard to get the next update written and coded.
Hello, how are things? I want to be active on itch.io
Doing pretty well just getting more work done slowly but surely.
Do you happen to play Persona? X3
I have not actually.
The Arcana is one of the themes of the series, hence why I'm mentioning it. It also revolves around forming bonds/friendships/relationships with other characters. A friend showed me them. There is one more thing, but its a spoiler to your VN, so I won't say.
Ah I see. I based the Arcana off of the Tarot Cards due to really enjoying the idea behind them. I will have to take a look at that game though cause it sounds interesting!
This is so cool! ^_^
Thank you!
Story is very interesting and even though characters look kinda small, I think art is cute! I'm curious to know how MC would look like... Will you add a sprite for him in the future updates? Or MC is this character that's being showed on starting screen? Anyway, I think it started in a very good way and I hope you keep updating it! :D
The character on the starting screen is not the MC. You will meet that character in the next update. There is a headshot of the MC once you obtain ARMA. Its on the top left. I am going to overhaul the character sprites in a later update, but I do like the small look to them so they don't overpower the scene and block out the background. I will probably add CG art of the MC later down the road though! I'm glad you like it so far!
Oh sorry for missing it, now I found it after rolling back, it was pretty small on screen hehe. And it's not a problem the characters look a bit small anyway :D. MC is looking good, even though it's a small sprite.. Anyway, thanks for the reply :)
Promissing plot, not a fan of the artwork, though...
Thanks for the comment! If I may ask, what is it about the artwork that makes it unfavorable. I’m looking to improve anywhere I can.
They look too thin, like they are unhealthily thin. For example: Yukine, for being studying a major in Athletics he's almost bulimic thin. Which makes no sense, someone studying to major in Athletics should have at the very least some muscle, since it makes sense that he'd want to dedicate himself to a career centered around sports...
Ah that was an issue I had noted when I initially made the sprites due to my canvas size. It’s something I do plan to go back and fix.
Good to know, though I expanded the reply. Check it out whenever you can. To give you a more detailed explanation.
That was my thought as well. The fact he wears looser clothing does not help either. I will be trying to define his muscles more when I go back and redraw the sprites to see if it will help.
Might want to mark the Windows version as also working on Linux
Thanks I missed that originally. It is updated to reflect Linux now.
Cute story, and I was enthralled by the characters. I do have some reservations about the A.R.M.A. though. It's a good plot device, and I see how it can propel the story, but it does seem distinctly unscientific, and yet extremely advanced at the same time. It's hard for me to believe that Iliff, a student, would have bene capable of creating some sort of advanced human-machine interfacing AI, it with all it can do. It does seem like the story is slightly cognizant of this, though.
I'm thinking of the bit about the unexplained energy. To detect something, you would have to have a detector made in the first place, and know what to look for. I don't think it makes sense to have a general detector that can detect anything and everything. The MC does make a note along those lines.
Maybe you have plans for this.
In any case, that's just my opinion, and I could still enjoy the story in spite of this.
I wish you all the best going forward!
I definitely do have some plot points down the road for the ARMA and why it works the way it does. I do agree that in the beginning it does sound a bit out of place and I am hoping as the story progresses and the other plot points come to light it will make more sense. Thanks for the feedback though, this was very helpful!
Definitely going to date all of them. 😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍